英语四级5分作文修改1
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英语四级待批改作文：
作文批改如下：
In the present-day（删除连字符）,immoral behavior in public is conventional（用词不当，conventional是传统的意思，可改为common）. Last week, I went to park with my sister. Some tourists discard（改为discarded）waste products into rivers for their convenience .No thing(改为Nothing) is more unethical than throw(改为throwing) away trashs(改为trashes) in rivers.
dust-begrimed(首字母大写) rivers damage a park's image and scare away tourists. They have caused a great deal of （后面只能加不可数名词）environmental problems. What's more, the junk from tourists contaminates rivers and thus contributes to fresh water shortages. We should try to minimize the effects and find some valid solutions to the problems.
whatever（首字母大写） form garbage takes, we have to manage its disposal properly to protect our health and the environment. （提纲要求本段提出具体的解决方法） 同学你好，一定要按照题目要求来写，第三段必须提出具体的解决办法。另外，每段的开头首字母要大写。还要注意时态的一致。
本文标题：英语四级5分作文修改1 - 英语四级作文_四级作文_四级英语作文In the present-day,immoral behavior in public is conventional.Last week,I went to park with my sister. Some tourists discard waste products into rivers for their convenience.No thing is more unethical than throw away trashs in rivers.
dust-begrimed rivers damage a park's image and scare away tourists. They have caused a great deal of environmental problems.What's more ,the junk from tourists contaminates rivers and thus contributes to fresh water shortages.We should try to minimize the effects and find some valid solutions to the problems.
whatever form garbage takes,we have to manage its disposal properly to protect our health and the environment.
作文批改如下：
In the present-day（删除连字符）,immoral behavior in public is conventional（用词不当，conventional是传统的意思，可改为common）. Last week, I went to park with my sister. Some tourists discard（改为discarded）waste products into rivers for their convenience .No thing(改为Nothing) is more unethical than throw(改为throwing) away trashs(改为trashes) in rivers.
dust-begrimed(首字母大写) rivers damage a park's image and scare away tourists. They have caused a great deal of （后面只能加不可数名词）environmental problems. What's more, the junk from tourists contaminates rivers and thus contributes to fresh water shortages. We should try to minimize the effects and find some valid solutions to the problems.
whatever（首字母大写） form garbage takes, we have to manage its disposal properly to protect our health and the environment. （提纲要求本段提出具体的解决方法） 同学你好，一定要按照题目要求来写，第三段必须提出具体的解决办法。另外，每段的开头首字母要大写。还要注意时态的一致。
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