高考英语优秀作文赏析:2008年北京卷情景作文1
满分范文1:
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really. First, the two candidates, Liu Dong and Wang Hong, gave their election speeches respectively. Then other students wrote a name of the candidate on paper and put it into a box. The teacher counted the number of pieces of paper voting for the two candidates fairly. Finally, Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. So Wang Hong became our monitor. It was an interesting election, isn’t it? Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评:
本文叙述内容完整而翔实。最突出的优点就是结构分明。作者通过使用了first,then,finally等表示顺序的词语,使文章层次感显得很强。其次,词语句式方面,作者也以简单句为主,增加了一份简练,流畅而自然。
积累卡片:
好词:1.respectively ad.各自地2.vote v. 选举3.election n. 选举 4. fierce a.激烈的
好句:1. Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really. 上周一,我们班举行了一次班长选举,两个候选人竞争激烈。
好处:句式的使用很有特点。
2. Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. 王红得到了28票,而刘东得到了15票。
好处:while的使用很地道,表示并列情形。
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