雅思写作如何论证?大作文不是讲道理
在雅思写作考试中,大作文考的是议论文,就是考察考生是否能够在相对较短的时间内搜集论据,具体地论证自己的观点。另外,雅思写作大作文的话题范围非常广泛,大到政府社会、经济、科技,小到工作、教育等话题都会考到。这对于长期只接受国内应试教育的考生来说,是有一定的困难,很多时候只看个题目都会觉得无从下笔,因而很多中国考生的论文空洞,缺乏说服力,那么雅思写作应该如何论证呢?
很多中国考生在应对雅思作文时喜欢通过讲道理来说明问题,但话题中并不是所有题目和内容都可以通过道理来说服他人的,比如关于“anti-social behavior”, 属于道德范畴的话题,是很难用道理来讲清楚的。所以,建议考生在备考时需要加强论据论证的能力,使其能够很好地支持自己的观点。
先来看下小站名师的一篇关于“anti-social behavior"的范文,大家可以借鉴下他的观点提出和地道的表达
Task 2 题目:Today there is a great increase in anti-social behaviors and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? Who should take responsibility for dealing with it? (选自 2011 年 01 月 22 日雅思写作机经)
Write at least 250 words
小站雅思频道B 老师范文:
With the development of modern society, there seems to be an irresistible uprising momentum of anti-social behaviors and lacking in respect between people. Various causes may lead to this increasingly prevailing phenomenon. From my personal perspectives, I tend to attribute this tendency to the morbid social conduct, the gap between the rich and the poor and the fiasco of school education.
开头叁排比提出自己的观点:病态的社会风气、贫富差距、学校教育的失败是原因,定义为五段论的基调,坚持五段论是高分作文最起码的结构!!!
The surroundings somewhat influence the behaviors of people due to the conformity mentality among us. A healthy social conduct will guide people, on the contrary, an unhealthy society can destroy the very good nature of people. Take an example of the terrorist attack in Norway 2011, which caused 77 innocent civilians’ lives. If there were a more harmonious social conduct to give more sense of belonging to that pervert killer, the tragedy could be prevented.
无比贴切的例子的使用,挪威变态杀手的恐怖袭击,完全西方化的思维。
The widening gap between the wealthy and the poor also triggered the psychology of hatred of those so-called “borderline men”. The enlarging social stratification and the growing income gap between the white-collars and manual workers stir the mental imbalance as well as the call on unfairness among the people with humble birth. Spontaneously, the rich became more and more disrespectful to the poor which eventually awakened the wrath of them.
关键词乃“社会边缘人”,围绕这个中心词展开,究其塬因乃贫富差距之大之可憎!!!
The school education is the last to be condemned. Were there more skillful and patient guidance of how to cultivate a complete and sound personality, to some extent, there won’t be that many extremists and borderline people .The formation of individual’s property and character molded during juvenile years, especially, adolescence, which, if slightly twisted, could affect a person’s later on life pattern and personality. That’s where a good or bad education makes difference.
谴责学习教育,没有注重培养学生健全人格!!
In summary, if only we could generate a healthier social conduct, if only the gap between the rich and the poor could be narrowed, if only the quality of school education could be bettered, the anti-social behaviors will be eliminated greatly and the society of mutual-respect will rise up again.
与话题相关的词汇
Modern society 当代社会
Social conduct 社会风气
Social status 社会地位
Disrespectful to… 对..不尊重的
School education 学校教育
Extremist极端主义者
Borderline man/person社会边缘人物
高分词汇、词组
Twisted 扭曲的
Morbid 病态的
Fiasco大失败
Trigger扣动扳机,激发
Stir激起,唤起
Condemn谴责
Juvenile years 青少年时代
Adolescence青春期
Mutual-respect 互相尊重
Conformity mentality 从众心理
The psychology of hatred仇富心理
social stratification社会分层(乃高阶社会学单词)
Manual worker 体力劳动者
Mental imbalance 心理不平衡
Humble birth出生贫寒的,地位粗鄙的
Complete and sound personality 完整健全的人格
Mould(英) Mold(美)用模子做,陶冶,形成
The widening gap 日益拉大的趋势
an irresistible momentum 一种不可逆的趋势
An Increasingly prevailing phenomenon 一个逐渐普遍的趋势
高分句型
1. With the development of modern society, there seems to be an irresistible uprising momentum of anti-social behaviors and lacking
in respect between people.(一种不可逆的上升趋势,开头就像轰炸机一下给你当头一棒,起评分就定位在 7 分以上了)
2. A healthy social conduct will guide people, on the contrary, an unhealthy society can destroy the very good nature of people.(B 老师我名人名言一般的高度精炼语言组织,这种语言出来基本肯定是 8+的分数了)
3. If there were a more harmonious social conduct to give more sense of belonging to that pervert killer, the tragedy could be prevented.
(紧接着一句虚拟语气,继续轰炸你的阅读神经)
4. The enlarging social stratification and the growing income gap between the white-collars and manual workers stir the mental imbalance as well as the call on unfairness among the people with
humble birth.(不管是无比高大上的 social stratification 还是小词 stir 和 call on 的使用,都让这句话看上去像是从哪本社会性书上抄的,所以考官看到这里已经在 8.5 和 9 分之间徘徊、犹豫了)
5. The formation of individual’s property and character molded during juvenile years, especially, adolescence, which, if slightly twisted,
could affect a person’s later on life pattern and personality.(连续的逗号使用,就是不出现句号,再加上宾语从句,合情合理,句子结构清晰,考官终于忍不住给 9 分了!!!)
让我们来举个例子,如下面关于“work at home or study at home”的一段例证:
IBM, one of the business giants, has saved nearly 70 million US dollars in its northeastern region by promoting telecommuting, which has been a driving force to other enterprises to convert their normal working staff into telecommuters. Companies in Japan are one of them and plan to launch the scheme in 2009, which, in turn, spiritually wins more supports from the existing employees, and attracts new hires. 这段话中的2个例子(商业巨头IBM和日本的企业计划)都较好地完成了“若员工选择在家上班,会对公司带来积极的作用”这一证明。
此外,提醒考生们需要注意的是,雅思大作文明确指出“give reasons or examples from your own experience”, 这里的“your own experience”和“your personal experience”是完全不同的概念。前者是指通过个人的学习和总结而获得的经验,后者是指个人经历或周围某个个体的故事。如谈到“working hard produces better results”, “your own experience”的例子一定是“some 3-year-high school students usually stay up late to review lessons and prepare for next day classes”, 而“your personal experience”的例子则应该是“my roommate, Tony has always been working hard on studies and staying up late every night”, 不难看出两者的区别。
此外,数据论证也是一个重要的方法,同时也是国外文章中非常常见的。使用这种方式,需要注意两点:数据和数据的来源。数据的真实性不重要,但至少要看上去是“真实的”。小站雅思老师建议,使用数据论证,提醒考生们不要刻意将数据夸张,这样反而会降低数据的真实可靠性。常见的句型有“a survey by….shows that / a research by….finds out that / a study by….suggests that / Statistics by….conclude that…”省略号的部分是需要根据文章的内容来填写的数据来源出处或机构。
小站提醒:常用的机构包括:国外大学、学院、报纸、杂志、电视台、之声、网站、研究机构、民意调查等。我们按顺序给大家做一个示范:the University of Sussex, Business College of several European countries, the USATODAY, state media CNN, BBC Talking Point, Childwise.com, American Institute for Research, Harris Interactive Poll等,考生可按照自己的情况,来准备几个备选方案以供使用。
以上就是小站老师总结的关于雅思写作考试几种论证方法,希望考生们能够借此学习,应该如何充分论证。
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