考研英语小作文批改：投诉信0-4分例文1
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英语复习资料：作文范文批改，考研频道编辑整理。
考研英语待批改作文：
0-4分
第一篇：
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me, preferably, as soon as possible,and I would like to have this matter setteled by three days.
Thank you for consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Li Ming.
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy(改为bought) in your shop in february（拼写错误，改为February）.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life（不能理解你的意思）. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october（这是中式英语，应删除，此外月份要大写）. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this（改为these） circustances(拼写错误，改为circumstances), I find it terrible to your work and upset me.(用法错误，这个句型是I find it +adj+that/to do sth.)
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me（加the money）, preferably, as soon as possible (preferably 后面加进一步的要求，加动词原型),and I would like to have this matter setteled （拼写错误，改为settled）by（后面是具体的时间，此处应改为in） three days.
Thank you for （加your）consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming.
2分
同学你好，标点符号与后面的单词空一格。语法错误比较多，建议你多背一些好的句型，此外，再细心一点，尽量避免出现单词拼写错误。
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0-4分
第一篇：
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy in your shop in february.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this circustances, I find it terrible to your work and upset me.
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me, preferably, as soon as possible,and I would like to have this matter setteled by three days.
Thank you for consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Li Ming.
Dear manager,
I am Li Ming.I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the moisturizing cream which I was buy(改为bought) in your shop in february（拼写错误，改为February）.
The reason for my dissatisfaction is it has been bad before its useful-life（不能理解你的意思）. In the first place, it smells horrible now, just in october（这是中式英语，应删除，此外月份要大写）. In addition, it has been totally bad. I did not dare to use it anymore. Under this（改为these） circustances(拼写错误，改为circumstances), I find it terrible to your work and upset me.(用法错误，这个句型是I find it +adj+that/to do sth.)
I appreciate it very much if you could refund me（加the money）, preferably, as soon as possible (preferably 后面加进一步的要求，加动词原型),and I would like to have this matter setteled （拼写错误，改为settled）by（后面是具体的时间，此处应改为in） three days.
Thank you for （加your）consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming.
2分
同学你好，标点符号与后面的单词空一格。语法错误比较多，建议你多背一些好的句型，此外，再细心一点，尽量避免出现单词拼写错误。
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