托福独立写作28分模版分享，亲测有效

模版总共475个词，加上填充部分后全文占词586。填写的内容以用词质朴为原则，并没有使用高大上的表达。对于语言基础一般，备考时间短的同学来说，非常实用~

Some people think that older children should be required to take care of the younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults. Which do you prefer?

第一段

In most cases, some people think that it is parents’ responsibility to take care of the whole family (1) out of various reasons and factors in situations, while others do not think so, which sound reasonable but ironical based on the fickle situations in society and history. As for me, despite the adventure of being entitled as “absolutist”, I will consistently support that older children should share the burden and be required to take care of their younger siblings (2).

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(1) 转述题目，或反对的观点

这道题是个选择类的题目，问及：究竟是完全由父母来担起照顾家庭的责任，还是应该要求年长一点的孩子来照顾弟弟妹妹。这边填充的部分就只需要选择一个与自己立场相反的观点来写即可。譬如说，我的立场是：长兄长姐应该照顾弟弟妹妹，那么空格(1)只需要填充对立的观点：父母来承担全部责任。

(2) 自己的立场态度

第二段

Maybe a lot of people stress the suspect of the authenticity of my point of view, but what I want to demonstrate is, this idea has been certified by our predecessor hundreds of years ago. Abraham Lincoln, for instance, is known as a great man respected by all of the American people, not merely because of his remarkable feat of leading the Union in Civil War and of emancipating the slaves in the South but because of the records and the anecdotes popular in politicians and socialists, telling the story of his family, education background and policies he made to seek his dream. And the reason why he can achieve such a howling success is closely related to the opinion I am holding now. However, despite the seeming irrelevance of the example, try to imagine, if this idea is not accepted doubtlessly, that means Lincoln refused to take the responsibility to take care of his little brothers (3). Consecutively, Lincoln would, in no ways become the man in our memory with integrity and love, as a result of which, he would never be supported by his senators and his people, let alone the fact that he can lead all the northern people to win such a historical battle.

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(3) 结合例子引入反对的观点

注意，这边不是直白地表达自己反对的观点!而是，结合林肯的例子，假设林肯他拒绝照顾弟弟妹妹，拒绝分担家庭责任，那么他也不会成为我们记忆中那个正直有爱的伟人了，那么他也无法获得人们的支持和信赖，更不用说最后在美国自由史上书下光辉的一笔了。这样写，在保证例子完整性的同时，又突出了观点。

第三段

Admittedly there are still some people who probably think that the time and space makes Lincoln a rare example, which cannot be cited as a ground support to the idea mentioned above. In our daily life, another example, the experience of my friend Jane can help to substantiate what I have held. Jane is a single mother in our lab who always wants to get success in her field. However, the efforts she has made never yield any return. The factor leading to this is thatshe wants to fully control both her work and children while her elder son has repeatedly expressed his willing to share the burden and look after his little brother (3). Although we cannot attribute the unpromising end to the assumption she takes granted, it is a fact that she never thought about other alternative options and just go straight in her own way. So the influence originated, developed and stimulated by the insane hypothesis should be considered a critical element.

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(3) 结合例子引入反对的观点

结合朋友Jane的例子，分析她为什么无法在工作上取得成功的原因。因为她既想全力扑在工作上，又不想放弃对孩子的照顾。然而，鱼和熊掌不可兼得，尽管她的大儿子反复表达了他愿意分担家庭重担，照顾弟弟的态度，但她仍然不放心，全权控制。尽管我们不能把这个作为她失败的唯一因素，但她无法平衡家庭和工作的事实，也是不可忽略的。

第四段

There also exists the fact that some other people still think that parents would be a better mentor for children’s growth (1), but it is obvious that it just helps in some specific situations, which pales in comparison to its opposite claim to such a huge extent that it is unnecessary to approve or disprove it.

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(1) 反对的观点

第四段是个小的让步段。点明：还是有一些人支持对立的观点，认为家长是更合适的导师来引导孩子的成长。但这是要在特定环境下才成立的。权衡左右，其实我们也无须过于纠结于此。注意，这段的重点在于让步的态度，逻辑方面体现作者的批判性思维，语言方面体现作者运用的娴熟。所以只需简单带到反对的态度即可。

第五段

So, judging from the reasoning and examples as well as the sub points I presented as above, we can easily draw the conclusion that older children of the family should be required to look after the younger children (2). Just as everybody knows, coins has their sides, but this fact cannot weaken the argument that there is always a side can be considered more by some people, and cannot weaken the argument that older children also play an indispensable role in a family(2).

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(2) 自己的立场态度

结尾部分要重申自己的立场，再一次强调：哥哥姐姐有责任应该要照顾自己的弟弟妹妹，他们在家庭中有着不可取代的地位。

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