BEC名师点评作文（10）
BEC商务英语考试在现在的考试形式占有重要的地位，当今社会不论是学生还是职场人都在努力的奋斗这提升自己的能力和晋升的空间，那么我们该怎么样复习好BEC英语呢!
我觉得用中文写一篇高质量的图表说明文很不简单，何况用英文，必须对图表的总体特征、主要对象走势、最大值、最小值、转折点等关键点做出简明扼要的陈述。好在说明文相对比较机械，还是有规律可循。我对课堂资料进行了一番整理，总结出一些常用句型和词汇，背诵了几篇范文，很快就上手了。下面是一些老师的点评，希望对大家有所帮助。
本期作文题目：
You are a regional salesman for an officeequipment supplier. You are organising yourschedule for visiting your existing clients nextmonth.
Write an e-mail of 40-50 words to one of yourclients:
*explaining why you would like to visit them
*proposing a time to visit
*asking them to suggest an alternative ifnecessary.
Sample:
Dear Mr. Shultz:
Our new catalogue is now ready. I will be in your city on 16th December and would be ableto visit your office to discuss our special Winter offers with you then. Please let me know if thiswould be convenient or contact me to suggest an alternative.
网友作文一：
Dear Mr. Smith,
I would like to visit you to discuss about the detail price and function of our officeequipment that you want to buy. So I am planning to visit you at this weekend. [1] Is itavailable for you? If it is not,[2] please suggest me an alternative.
With best regards,
Yours sincerely,
Ellen
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[1]啰嗦。如果要用定语从句，建议改为：that we offered. 后句去掉。
[2]合二为一。If that is not available for you, please suggest an alternative.
网友作文二：
To: Jim
From: Sant
Subject: Visiting Schedule
In order to talk with you on the conditions and items of the insurance policy, I attempt tovisit you on 22th November. Provided that the date is unconvenient for you ,do not hesitate tosuggest me the alternative days. [1]
Regards!
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[1]这个过去分词出师无名，句子主体是没有主语的，这是祈使句。建议把句子补齐，把主语添上。
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