剑七雅思考官高分范文解析
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.有人天生就有某种天份,比如体育和音乐的天份。但是有人说任何孩子都可能被教成运动员和音乐家。讨论两种观点?
★ 范文介绍:
This model has been prepared by an examiner as an example of a very good answer. However, please note that this is just one example out of many possible approaches.
★ 头脑风暴:
这篇文章其实考察的是勤奋和天份哪一个对于成功更加重要。人人都渴望成功,但是一些特殊的领域,像音乐,体育,文学和艺术创造等,杰出的人物多是需要天赋的,乔丹不一定是最勤奋的运动员,但是一定是最有篮球天赋的。莫扎特从三岁时就显出了非凡的音乐天才,他时常走到钢琴前面,按着琴键细听,并努力弹出他曾经听到过的音乐。但是世间毕竟还是凡人为多,我们也常说天道酬勤,勤能补拙,成功是99%的勤奋+1%的天份。所以支持勤奋明显是更站得住脚。
★ 经典语料库:(考官果然是用词精准,许多小词非常贴切和漂亮,下面所有的单词在我的8000词汇课程中都有讲解)
1.acquire 学习(尤其是指知识和技能的获得)
2.innate talents 与生俱来的才华
3.inherit 遗传而得
4.nature 天份
5.nurture 后天的教育
6.excel 优秀,胜过他人
7.exceptional 优秀的
8.facility 便利,容易
9.via 通过
10. versus 于---相对
★谋篇布局:
Para. 1 背景介绍+争议焦点(作者首段没有提出观点,自然过渡到了论证的部分,也留下了想象空间,激发读者兴趣的――文无定法).
Para. 2 反方(支持勤奋)观点的合理性
Para. 3 正方(支持天份)观点的合理性
Para. 4 写作意图(客观辩证的让步正方法观点的合理性,综合正反方观点的合理性提出自己的个性观点)
Para 5 总结观点(明确提出支持反方观点,但是又让步了一下正方观点的合理性)
①The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, (插入语)sport, art or music.
②Obviously, education systems are based on the belief that all children can effectively be taught to acquire different skills, including those associated with sport, art or music. So from our own school experience, we can find plenty of evidence to support the view that(用事实支持论点) a child can acquire these skills with continued teaching and guided practice.
③However, some people believe that innate talent is what differentiates a person who has been trained to play a sport or an instrument, from those who become good players. In other words, (再解释)there is more to the skill than a learned technique, and this extra talent cannot be taught, no matter how good the teacher or how frequently a child practices.
④ I personally think that(写作意图) some people do have talents that are probably inherited via their genes. Such talents can give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while more hard-working students never manage to reach a comparable level. But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent. Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent.
⑤In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, (明确支持反方观点)but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required.(让步正方观点的合理性)
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