考研英语看图作文范例点评：过度呵护
看图作文在英语作文中是大家普遍缺乏练习的一种类型，一个提高的方式就是看范例和点评，针对其中的错误进行自我修正。
过度呵护：
写作原文
From the picture above we can see that there are three trees in the picture, and one of them is growing very strongly.(用一般现在时，且strongly运用不合适。可改为one of them grows very well) However, the other two trees (去掉)look like very small. If you take a(去掉) careful notice, you'll find that a tree has become bend(bent) because of (去掉，因为后面是个句子)the big tree hostile his development. (the big tree holds back its growth)The drawer(drawer是抽屉的意思，painter) of the image aims at revealing a common phenomenon in our country, children today are generally spoiled. There are two major reasons for the problem. On one hand, as the reform of population policy, most families are allowed(加to have)only one child who is usually regarded as the "apple" of parent's(parents') eye. Therefore, parents are always try (trying) their best to provide their child with everything they want. On the other hand, lacking the awareness of bearing hardships is also an important reason that can not be ignored.I think it is imperative that we should take some effective measures. To begin with, our government can modify the policy that allows families to raise more than one students(child). In addition, the most (加effective或者important之类的形容词) measure of all is that we should cultivate the sense of independence. Only in this way can we ameliorate the problem in the near future.
从上面我们可以看到，图中有三棵树的图片，其中一个增长非常强劲。然而，其他两树看起来很小。如果你把一个仔细注意，你会发现一棵树变得弯曲因为大树敌对他的发展。抽屉的图像，针对我国揭示一个普遍的现象，如今的孩子都被宠坏了。这个问题有两个主要原因。一方面，由于人口政策的改革，大多数家庭是允许的只有一个孩子，通常被称为“苹果”的家长的眼睛。因此，父母总是尝试最好的给自己的孩子提供他们想要的一切。另一方面，缺乏吃苦意识也是不可忽视的一个重要原因。我认为这是我们必须要采取一些有效的措施。首先，我们的政府可以修改政策，允许家庭提高了不止一个学生。此外，最测量都是我们应该培养独立意识。只有这样我们才能改善在不久的将来的问题。
总体点评
文章准确把握了试题的考察点，立意正确，内容较充实，有衔接，层次清楚，需注意以下问题：1、文章有些许语法错误，需检查自己是由于粗心大意还是因为在名词、形容词、副词等方面掌握有问题，加强自己的语法基础;2、文章基本采用简单句，应该注意句式变换，可适当模仿一些经典佳句，运用到自己的文章中，使文章有亮点;3、多积累一些相关的素材，使自己文章的内容更加深刻。在规定的时间完成作文后，多润色几遍，使其更上一个台阶。
参考分数(满分20分)：14
英语写作水平的提升需要不断地练习，在改正错误中不断取得进步，不怕犯错误，怕明知道犯错误却不面对。看了范文和点评，希望大家有思考，有提高。
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