The First Date
Now he is combing his hair and being dressed in his best suit. It seems as if he was ready for a date. Actually that' s what he keeps considering these days. About a week ago, one of his friends taught him how to chat and make friends through the Internet. And that was really important for him who can hardly get a date in the real world. So now as his first blind date approaches, his mind is full of imagination. Very excited and a little afraid, he begins the trip to the agreed place.
What his net girlfriend is called sounds romantic Red Rose. And he thinks the girl has plenty of experience and abundant knowledge. He has tried lots of methods and finally won her heart. Now it's time for a date. He even boasted to his friends how lucky he was. Taking his coming wonderful romance for granted, he smiles at times on the trip.
Soon he gets to the destination, a lovely park. He can see someone holding a rose waiting there, and the rose is their password. He can't wait to rush to her, but as he comes near, he can tell that is in fact an old lady. Oh, how can such an old lady be my Red Rose! He complains to himself. But there's nobody else nearby. And at that very moment, the lady finds him standing there still and probably in a daze. He feels cold and wants to get away from the embarrassing situation. "Hi, do you have a date here?" The lady greets him. "Oh, sorry, I just went the wrong way. I have a date somewhere else..." his legs trembling, his hands holding his rose at the back. "Oh, I see..."The lady turns away and he quickly grasps the chance to slip a
Back to his study, he turns on his computer and changes his motto as follows: "I will never believe the virtual romance any more!!!" And what he does next is to put Red Rose into his blacklist.
With a long sigh, he sits down, tired and hopeless. Although it's sunny outside, he feels his life in an endless darkness.
简 评
网络世界,想必大家都非常熟悉或热衷吧!这篇叙事文给我们讲述了一段网络带来的阴差阳错的恋爱故事。哑然失笑之后,我们心里是否还会留下点什么呢?也许,虚拟世界中并不只是无穷的乐趣?
文章构思巧妙,语言平实,表达流畅,节奏明快,生动幽默,有声有色,可读性强,寓意深刻。值得一提的是主人公的心理刻画真实、准确、到位。一个心情经历波澜起伏,由喜转悲的少年的气恼的、狼狈的却又无奈的形象跃然纸上,令人忍俊不禁。一般现在时的使用使文章更显生动、传神。当然,若能再略施笔墨,对剧中人物,尤其是“old lady”添加一些描写,相信更能形成理想与现实的落差,突出对比的效果。
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